Bevar in the Wild Kickstarter!

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Post » Wed May 08, 2013 12:09 pm

If you've been working on the game for months, do you have any in game footage? It's looking a lot like 'Don't Starve' from what I can tell from the screen shots.
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Post » Wed May 08, 2013 1:21 pm

@AnD4D Not at the moment, because I cant find a good screen recorder other than Fraps. I found Screencast o Matic, but quality isnt as good. But the game has many things that make it different from Don't Starve. Such as, Time Travel, Pumpkins, Pumkin Communities, all 4 seasons, a Food, Health, Hunger, and Corruptness Bar, and other stuff.
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Post » Wed May 08, 2013 1:41 pm

This is camtasia, the best, but open source and free...

http://sourceforge.net/projects/portableapps/files/CamStudio%20Portable/CamStudioPortable_2.7_English.paf.exe

Also, I would recommend don't shout on the Kickstart presentation (aka, shout is use CAPSLOCK!!!), because it give us the feel like you're in panic while writing.

I didn't understand how to play, or what to do in the game, hoping for a better presentation.

Good luck with the project!
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Post » Wed May 08, 2013 10:22 pm

@TELLES0808 Thanks! We'll try to make a better video.
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 3:35 am

I like Lyndan, that dude is funny lol

I would suggest talking more about the game and trying to show something of what you have too, also plan out what you're going to say a little and try to talk a little louder and a little more clearly. Lyndan did a good job on his speech but more information is needed. You guys are taking thee feedback well, don't let it discourage you by any means =]

I hope it goes well for you guys...
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 1:05 pm

@Patriick @TELLES0808 @AnD4D @OrangeTapioca @Rory Okay, so I made a second video, it goes more in-depth about the gameplay and stuff, Haven't added it to the campaign, but I wanted to see what you guys think. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rO2cVF0NxXs
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 1:35 pm

@InvaderX

It's important to have a video set up to show what type of message you are putting across even if the audio is on mute. On this latest video, you are holding the camera in your hands while spinning back and forth on the chair and generally not looking at the camera.

This, to me, suggests that you are either not comfortable making the video, or you simply don't care. Either way, this puts the same feeling across to me, seeing as you are asking for my (and of course, others) money. I do not feel comfortable in doing so, or doubt that you'll finish the game (based on the video alone).

I'll admit, I only got through about a minute and a half before I turned it off.

My suggestion would be to try and make a video without anyone speaking. Maybe have some nice music, and some screenshots and text explaining what the game will be like.
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 4:20 pm

i think you should hold off on the kickstarter campaign for now until you can get your stuff ironed out. it's just not the video but the description especially the game part and the kickstarter comment.OrangeTapioca2013-05-10 16:59:36
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 4:57 pm

@invaderx

I don't think the new video is playing to any of your projects strengths, or likely to win over investors. The main reason for this is that for the most part it's treating the viewers to an up the nose Worms Eye View of your face, and the constant movement of the chair makes everything a bit wobbly. I'm afraid I gave up watching after the first two minutes.

Now, to play to your strengths - you have a voice over guy, so use him to do all the talking. Put that over any in game footage, or stills you may have, giving descriptions of game play elements that might set your game aside from the hundreds of other kick starters out there. Try to resist saying things like 'its going to be cool' or 'hey, this is really awesome' and show the viewers what's awesome about it.

One of the biggest strengths you have at the moment is you respond well to others criticism. If you keep up with that sort of attitude, I'm sure that in time you'll go on to do well. Although I doubt this Kickstarter will succeed as you're asking for a lot of money and not yet giving people enough incentive to invest, I'm sure that you'll learn a lot from the process and hit back stronger and harder the next time.

Whatever happens, finish that game (I'm sure you can make it without financial investment. That's what being a hobbyist game maker is all about!) and keep on listening to the advice of the good folk on this site. They've helped me out a lot - half of the time without even realising it.
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Post » Fri May 10, 2013 9:40 pm

[QUOTE=InvaderX] @Patriick @TELLES0808 @AnD4D @OrangeTapioca @Rory Okay, so I made a second video, it goes more in-depth about the gameplay and stuff, Haven't added it to the campaign, but I wanted to see what you guys think. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rO2cVF0NxXs[/QUOTE]


Well I'll have to give you kudos for trying again, and honestly. Now I know more about the game so thank you, but I think you would need to have another attempt but I'm going to try and offer some pointers and not just be an ass and not give reason for saying that.

I do love the idea behind the game too by the way, it sounds interesting andd quite fun...
I saw someone else mention tha tit didn't look like you cared too much, this is the impression you kind of give at times on the video from looking away from the camer and such but (I guess it could also be nerves of recording?) It appears as if you're not paying too much attention, that can be fixed easily enough though!

Instead of holding the camera up and moving around so much I suggest maybe setting it down on something sturdy and if you want to move around and wave your arms and such as some people tend to do when explaining things then it shouldn't be as distracting/disruptive.

With all of that said I pretty much agree with Dave Hailwood, he hit the nail on the head with his response and has said some of which I would have liked to have gotten out but perhaps in better words.



[QUOTE=Dave Hailwood] @invaderx

I don't think the new video is playing to any of your projects strengths, or likely to win over investors. The main reason for this is that for the most part it's treating the viewers to an up the nose Worms Eye View of your face, and the constant movement of the chair makes everything a bit wobbly. I'm afraid I gave up watching after the first two minutes.

Now, to play to your strengths - you have a voice over guy, so use him to do all the talking. Put that over any in game footage, or stills you may have, giving descriptions of game play elements that might set your game aside from the hundreds of other kick starters out there. Try to resist saying things like 'its going to be cool' or 'hey, this is really awesome' and show the viewers what's awesome about it.

One of the biggest strengths you have at the moment is you respond well to others criticism. If you keep up with that sort of attitude, I'm sure that in time you'll go on to do well. Although I doubt this Kickstarter will succeed as you're asking for a lot of money and not yet giving people enough incentive to invest, I'm sure that you'll learn a lot from the process and hit back stronger and harder the next time.

Whatever happens, finish that game (I'm sure you can make it without financial investment. That's what being a hobbyist game maker is all about!) and keep on listening to the advice of the good folk on this site. They've helped me out a lot - half of the time without even realising it.[/QUOTE]

I would love to see this project finished, I honestly don't think the project would die without getting funded but I know for sure it would make things easier! At least with Kickstarter, if you fail. You can always start another and try again at a later point to help out.

I am surprised as how well you've taken the feedback/criticism so far, at least you're trying. Some people would just get annoyed and give up or get knocked back and the attitude you show for getting right back and trying again is good in my eyes... You will surely succeed if you keep at that as Dave has said.


The best advice here has to be to get your voice actor to help with the talking and such... Hopefully he is available?


I hope some of what I have said helps and that things go well, I will keep my eyes on Bevar, I like the sound of it so far.
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